The Hours Before Dawn
Category: Other
by Sylvia Leusner — Posted August 26, 2009
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Author's Comments:
Just experimenting with free verse. Hope you like it.Comments by: Dulcinea
I love your experiment. Your words are rather soothing...the words 'murmur' and 'lull' and 'calming'...all ease my spirit and soothe my soul. Great verse. Dulcinea
Author's Response: Thanks, so much, so glad you enjoyed my poem. Always appreciate your kind thoughts on it and for reading. xSylvia
I love your experiment. Your words are rather soothing...the words 'murmur' and 'lull' and 'calming'...all ease my spirit and soothe my soul. Great verse. Dulcinea
Author's Response: Thanks, so much, so glad you enjoyed my poem. Always appreciate your kind thoughts on it and for reading. xSylvia
Comments by: queen
I do indeed like this. Very sensual and full of the calming times just before dawn. ab
Author's Response: Thanks, AB, so glad you enjoyed this poem Always appreciate your kind thoughts on it. xSylvia
I do indeed like this. Very sensual and full of the calming times just before dawn. ab
Author's Response: Thanks, AB, so glad you enjoyed this poem Always appreciate your kind thoughts on it. xSylvia
Comments by: Golfshe
I love this, Syl! Very awesome and picturesque, too! This is really great and such a joy to see you expand and grow in your writing talent! Love it, girl! Sheri
Author's Response: Thanks, Sheri, so glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your kind thoughts on it. xSylvia
I love this, Syl! Very awesome and picturesque, too! This is really great and such a joy to see you expand and grow in your writing talent! Love it, girl! Sheri
Author's Response: Thanks, Sheri, so glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your kind thoughts on it. xSylvia
Comments by: cobaltcat09
Boy, do I wish I had had this last night! Instead I got five hours sleep. Great job capturing what sleep should be. Beth
Author's Response:
Boy, do I wish I had had this last night! Instead I got five hours sleep. Great job capturing what sleep should be. Beth
Author's Response:
Thanks, Beth, glad you liked my poem. Yes, sleep is a precious gift we appreciate more when we don't get enough. Thanks for reading. Sylvia
Comments by: LadyFair
Liked the title of this verse
and the word choices.
Nice flow and rhyme.
Enjoyed the reading.
LadyFair/Bev
Author's Response: Thanks, Bev, so glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate you reading and your kind thoughts on it. Sylvia
Liked the title of this verse
and the word choices.
Nice flow and rhyme.
Enjoyed the reading.
LadyFair/Bev
Author's Response: Thanks, Bev, so glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate you reading and your kind thoughts on it. Sylvia
Comments by: martin
Love it. Very effectively crafted. Great use of words that are experiential and create another dimension of reality. So soft, dreamy and creates a photo of floating in another world. love the, velvet murmur, calming shores and gentle warm breezes that are results of your senses being lulled. Memorable and deeply moving word paintings. I have to give this an unparalleled due to so many dimensions described with penetrating brevity. martin
Author's Response: Wow, made my day :) thank you for this lovely start to it. Thanks, Martin, so glad you enjoyed my feeble attempt at free verse. My brain is so used to thinking in quatrains, but when this poem formed in my mind, I liked it, didn't intentionally try to rhyme it, just liked the words for it. Appreciate your very kind and generous review on it and always appreciate your thoughts. Sylvia
Love it. Very effectively crafted. Great use of words that are experiential and create another dimension of reality. So soft, dreamy and creates a photo of floating in another world. love the, velvet murmur, calming shores and gentle warm breezes that are results of your senses being lulled. Memorable and deeply moving word paintings. I have to give this an unparalleled due to so many dimensions described with penetrating brevity. martin
Author's Response: Wow, made my day :) thank you for this lovely start to it. Thanks, Martin, so glad you enjoyed my feeble attempt at free verse. My brain is so used to thinking in quatrains, but when this poem formed in my mind, I liked it, didn't intentionally try to rhyme it, just liked the words for it. Appreciate your very kind and generous review on it and always appreciate your thoughts. Sylvia
Comments by: Cookie
Sylvia this is written with such a tender emotion that it unveils itself to the reader as such.
Bravo
Love Cookie
Author's Response: Thanks, Cookie. Glad you liked my effort at this style. I'm usually so proned to quatrains, but this poem just formed differently in my mind. Appreciate you reading. xSylvia
Sylvia this is written with such a tender emotion that it unveils itself to the reader as such.
Bravo
Love Cookie
Author's Response: Thanks, Cookie. Glad you liked my effort at this style. I'm usually so proned to quatrains, but this poem just formed differently in my mind. Appreciate you reading. xSylvia
Comments by: Rhymer
This reminds me of being half awake and then almost fully knowing it soon will be time to rise and counting the precious moments before one has to get up. Great write. :) Marie
Author's Response: Thanks, Marie. Yes, I hate it when that happens, always feel more tired when that clock goes off, lol. Appreciate you reading. Sylvia
This reminds me of being half awake and then almost fully knowing it soon will be time to rise and counting the precious moments before one has to get up. Great write. :) Marie
Author's Response: Thanks, Marie. Yes, I hate it when that happens, always feel more tired when that clock goes off, lol. Appreciate you reading. Sylvia
Comments by: amiller
Sylvia, do you know what I like about "free verse"?
It does not restrict you to a few words that rhyme.
I am not saying that it is better, but, at times, it is less restrictive.
Once you start using it more often you will find that your choice of available words to express your emotions and feelings will increase.
The poem above is a great start.
Nice to see you writing again.
art
Author's Response: Thanks, Art, glad you liked my attempt at free verse. Yes, I can see how you would have that freedom and appreciate your important advice on it. I guess I just like quatrains so much, thats' where my poetic mind flows when I start to write, but not with this one, this poem came differently to me and I liked it so I never tried to rhyme it intentionally, just liked the words that came to mind for it. Sylvia
Sylvia, do you know what I like about "free verse"?
It does not restrict you to a few words that rhyme.
I am not saying that it is better, but, at times, it is less restrictive.
Once you start using it more often you will find that your choice of available words to express your emotions and feelings will increase.
The poem above is a great start.
Nice to see you writing again.
art
Author's Response: Thanks, Art, glad you liked my attempt at free verse. Yes, I can see how you would have that freedom and appreciate your important advice on it. I guess I just like quatrains so much, thats' where my poetic mind flows when I start to write, but not with this one, this poem came differently to me and I liked it so I never tried to rhyme it intentionally, just liked the words that came to mind for it. Sylvia